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Just done with the second one. Keep the good work coming!

Thanks a lot for the positive feedback, third one should be ready today or tomorrow

And here's the third chapter, as promised.

F Y I

• 2 men are a buddy team, 2 men, private
  4 men are 1 fire team, 4 men, lance corporal
  4 fire team are 1 squad, 16 men, sergeant
  4 squads are 1 company, 64 men, lieutenant
  4 companies are 1 battalion, 256 men, lieutenant colonel
  4 battalions are 1 regiment, 1024 men, colonel
  4 regiments are 1 brigade, 4096 men, brigade general
  4 brigades are 1 division, 16384 men, major general
  4 divisions are 1 corps, 65536 men, lieutenant general
  4 corps are 1 army, 262144 men, marshal

how do i put in to works how mush i like this

That was a hell of a change Liked it of course

Glad you guys like it so far, I can assure you that from now on things will get more intens. I dont know if the fourth chapter will be done next weekend, I have 4 birthdayparties in 1 week O.o

In this case you're dismissed Have fun!

So FINALLY I posted the fourth chapter, luckily I also did all the buttonbashing on the rest of the chapters as well so they will probably be uploaded soon.
As you'll read they stand before a great battle...

"Listen carefully, I will say this only once."
"I'm listening René"
"It will begin! The birds are going south"

Here's the fifth chapter, hope you like it.

Read a lot of tips and tricks, I must say it helped me a lot and improved my writing somewhat. At least better that chapter 4, if I'm allowed I say so myself.

maybe a little overdone in terms of drama, but hey!

ITS WAR!!!

just let me know what you think

You've captured a WW1 Ypres vibe nicely, and piled pressure on Stephen. How long will it be until he takes out his anger on his generals rather than the Sheromians?

Some of your paragraphs are quite long, I find it easier to read if the text is more broken up, but I'm using a smallish monitor.

Looking forward to the next installment, keep up the good work.

Wow, thank you sir.
Creating a ww1 atmosphere was totally my intention, mission complete.
About the paragraphs, I'll see what I can do. Most of the work is done for the next chapters you see?
I can, however, create a pdf printable version for anyone who's interested. If that makes reading large junks of text easier.

But thanks for your reply and for Stephen.... You surely wouldn't want any spoillers now do you?

Tsjernobyl wrote:You surely wouldn't want any spoillers now do you?

NO WAY

Chapter six is here

Sorry for the delay, christmas was holding me down

PFFFiew... finally the last chapter.
Somehow I was constantly accidentally very unintentionally kept away from my pc
This is it then, my first contribution and first story I've ever written, ploughing through to the end was sometimes a bit grindy.
So please let me know what you think and if another story is demanded
Can't wait to get better at this

EDIT: "Delay" Is something that seems to repeat itself often when uploading a chapter....

hello hello, I just wanted to ask to anyone who has read this story where it needs to be improved. I'm mapping out all the improvements entirely and working on a major improved version, Though I have A LOT of points myself I can always use the viewpoints of other people.

Do I need to add more chapters?
Do I need to add more immersion, and where?

That kind of things, thanks in advance.



Edit: Almost like an entire re-write, I'm going over every sentence and rework it all